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Old 07-28-2012, 10:09 AM   #1
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My Wish

I wish you would look at me
with your big, brown eyes
pretend like I am some kind of prize

blush at me and then look away
bite your lip
like you don't know what to say

and then smile at me so slightly guarded
as if you're unsure how you're regarded

I wish you could feel like me
to you.
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Old 07-28-2012, 10:15 AM   #2
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Re: My Wish

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Old 08-06-2012, 10:32 AM   #3
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Re: My Wish

wow! that was totally amazing! is that your composition, i have not notice any grammar error because of the message of the poem! i really like that .
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Old 08-06-2012, 08:28 PM   #4
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Re: My Wish

With a few prepositions in their correct places, an omitted comma, and a few periods I would give this a 7/10
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Old 08-08-2012, 10:38 PM   #5
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Re: My Wish

I really like this
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Old 08-09-2012, 07:49 AM   #6
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yeah, I'm usually better with grammar and in the written form it's actually proper. I'm glad some of you liked it though.
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it's cool though.
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nice blondstrom
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I like it, and I actually wish it was a bit longer :3
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I know this feeling so well its painfull. 9/10
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Old 09-05-2012, 06:38 PM   #11
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fake and gay seriously, this thing are too boring and banal...but keep goint
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