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Old 08-28-2012, 01:56 AM   #1
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Wink Finished Song! XD

Hurro strangers! Well I am happy to say I've FINALLY finished that song of mine! so here it is and tell me what you think!
Paradise

Close the doors,
Shut my window
Staring through the glass
Looking at my past.

Open hearts,
Open road
Keep on getting faster
As the green light turns to yellow.

When we keep movin' on,
I just wanna yell STOP!

If I could escape to Paradise,
Don't you think that I would
give it a try?
Another dare, another dream
Another thing you think seems,
So unthinkable.

Where do you go,
when I'm not home?
This will never last
if you cheat behind my back.

Always lost,
and never found.
What happened to the days
when you made my world go 'round?

But as we keep stretching on and on,
I just wanna yell STOP!

If I could escape to Paradise,
don't you think that I would
give it a try?
Another dare, another dream
Another thing you think seems,
So unthinkable.

But now I'm movin' on,
I've been stuck so long.
And you won't hold me down!

If I could escape to Paradise,
don't you think that I would
give it a try?
Another dare, another dream
Another thing you think seems,
So unthinkable.



And that's my song!!!!!! hope you all like the finished piece!

Plz rate from 1-10 or just give me some feed back!

Thanks again!
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