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Old 09-24-2012, 02:34 PM   #1
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This one actually rhymes

Preface:

I didn't plan the rhyme scheme before I wrote it, as I hardly ever plan anything.
Dickens has also used the word "earnt". I think that's cool.
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I can't tell you when I'll die,
I cant tell you why I've lied,
I can tell you that I've cried,
But I can't explain why.

To share my thoughts,
is very difficult,
to think so hard,
gives me a jolt.
I'm not a bard,
but I'm not a dolt,
my life is fraught,

with dangers,
and with mayhem
to meet strangers,
is to slay them.

Of course not literally,
but metaphorically.
To make them someone they weren't,
to deal them the fate that they've earnt.

This is the path that I've chosen,
oh dear, I hope it stays golden.
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Old 09-25-2012, 02:01 PM   #2
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Re: This one actually rhymes

Here is something I wrote, I hope you won't mind me putting it in your thread(i am too lazy to create one)
(I wrote it about 2 years ago, excuse ,me for it is a bit immature !)
There are 6 billion people on the planet
Everyone has their own insight
different views, different prospects,
and I am confused between the wrong and the right?

What is true and where to go?
support the left or support the right?
0 one's are 0 or 1 zero's are 0
what is wrong & what is the right?

the egg came first or the hen?
first came the day, ot the night?
pencils came first or the pen?
what is wrong & what is the right?

Men are better or women?
equality is a constitutional right
or is equality a utopian aim
what is wrong & what is the right?

Be secular or be theologist,
follow religion with all ur might,
or forget the religion & be atheist
what is wrong & what is the right?

to be the leader,
or follow the "knights"
or forget the group & be a lone treader,
what is wrong & what is the right?

work hard for the future?
or living in present is right?
planning or blithe endeavour?
what is wrong & what is the right


are we all born with destiny?
or karma makes our future dull or bright?
still future remains unpredictable, it's the greatest irony
what is wrong & what is the right?

to run , to run away!
or fight what u belive (is right)
or stand,just stand and pray?
what is wrong & what is the right?

If i ask a question,you'll fret
because it will make my poem a mess
I DONT KNOW WHAT TO DO YET?
PERSUE TRUTH OR PERSUE HAPPINESS?

Be wise or be happy,
truth can cause euphoria or depression
to be or not to be,
THAT is the question

at the end of the day
if i keep asking such questions
u'll close the poem and run away
with a "w-t-h, who cares!" expression

so i put my pen and stand
only to ask a question
is this the end
of my poem and confusion?
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Re: This one actually rhymes

I couldn't really form an opinion as I'm like.. post-fap.

But it looks good.

Uhm. I couldnt help but hear it being read in the "hello this is dog" voice.
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