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Old 12-29-2012, 01:15 PM   #1
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A poem written by myself (Nivivrus) and The Bombest

The fur ball was rolling,
shining bright like an emerald stone.
Dropping through the air and bouncing off walls,
waiting to be thrown.
It wants what it is already doing,
so I picked it up again, and threw it at a friend.
A loud thud rang across the room and like a record player looping,
the fur ball was rolling,
shining bright like an emerald stone.


The poem was written with us taking turns writing each line. I think it's kinda interesting What do you think of it and what would you name it (I like to have other people name my poems lol)

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Oh yeah, and for those who don't get it (I think it's kinda obvious but just to be sure) it's about a person throwing a tennis ball at his friend.
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Old 12-29-2012, 01:16 PM   #2
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im so proud of our work.
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Re: A poem written by myself (Nivivrus) and The Bombest

it's good
and the name for poem could be something like crazy ball trowing..
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Re: A poem written by myself (Nivivrus) and The Bombest

It's cool, but It's about throwing a ball. Poetry isn't just the rhythmic pattern, it's also a deeper feeling. You did not write a poem, you wrote a rhyme. That being said if there is a true meaning, there is no wrong way to write poetry.
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Re: A poem written by myself (Nivivrus) and The Bombest

I kinda looked at it after writing it and saw it as an interpretation about the monotony that goes on in a person's life and how being bored causes them to just repeat the same process, like throwing a ball continuously.
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I LIKE THAT CONCEPT! High freakin' five!
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I thought about the green chaos emerald in sonic. lol.
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*high fives a computer monitor and is fortunate enough not to break it*

Nice signature by the way :P
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