Just wrote this right now...

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      This one isn't so depressing, but it's not exactly happy. I'll probably revise it later, make it connect a little more but here you go.



      Her wistful eyes and her soft, rose lips
      a soul, alone; the yearn for that forgotten poem
      Delicate like a flower, she flounders within her thoughts

      The need to be loved by not just anyone is filling her on empty
      I see the hope as it dwindles past to almost just a fear of the unknown
      The fear, it festers and fills her thoughts; breaking her dreams in two

      I love her so deeply, yet she doesn't see me; I'm buried underneath these words
      Our souls share a vibe and I want it to thrive, but alas, it's not to be
      Romanticism runs deep, but the tragic's so meek that it layers thick and steep

      My wish is ungranted, our lives left apart but joy! We are still in tune
      Her wisdom's my pleasure, I wish it forever and I sing her song to the moon
      So gentle in life, understanding and pure - despite her flaws a plenty

      If only to save her, my heart's greatest favour and I shall ask of nothing more
      For I'm still enamoured and I would just stammer; nothing more shall leave these lips
      The silence, a blessing and my eyes will grow sightless, for her beauty eclipses all sight

      And I will be fine, just laying this rhyme for all but her to see.

      ...:gay:
      "Haters can keep hating, but I'm just gonna dance."
      - Patrick Kane; Chicago Blackhawks
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      This isn't a poem, but here it goes.


      You feel the vibrations off the wood, coming from the keys as they're pressed by her soft, slender hands - fingers flicking and hiting the notes.

      Eyes intense, they do not see you - in her own world. Like Liszt, her music is pleasure and it goes on forever.

      Until it stops.

      The stop, longer than a pause between sheets or pieces she plays.
      A stop can be the end.

      Lucky is that it will be the beginning of a new tune
      a solo symphony of love and hope.

      Right then, she'll look into your eyes and you'll see what beauty really is.
      Intensified by the swirling sounds as her fingers tap the bars from memory.

      Your heart drops.

      Sinks in and follows her where ever she wishes to take you
      beyond the field of dreams.

      Together at last ~ forever.
      "Haters can keep hating, but I'm just gonna dance."
      - Patrick Kane; Chicago Blackhawks
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      Just a little thing I wrote this morning after talking to her.


      Thoughts racing,
      I thought that you were the one
      Heart aching
      You said it can't be done
      Together at last
      But only in my dreams
      A simple dream
      Though how silly it seems
      To be with you
      I'd spend my life in sleep
      "Haters can keep hating, but I'm just gonna dance."
      - Patrick Kane; Chicago Blackhawks
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      Blondstrom wrote:

      Just a little thing I wrote this morning after talking to her.


      Thoughts racing,
      I thought that you were the one
      Heart aching
      You said it can't be done
      Together at last
      But only in my dreams
      A simple dream
      Though how silly it seems
      To be with you
      I'd spend my life in sleep

      This is interesting. Can I have a backstory please?
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      Hipster wrote:

      This is interesting. Can I have a backstory please?


      As you've probably guessed, I'm in love with someone I'm not with and the other night I had a dream we were together, then got a call from her yesterday and it was a little weird, but reminded me of how I felt in the dream vs. knowing we'll probably never be together.

      It's kind of lame, but I miss her.
      "Haters can keep hating, but I'm just gonna dance."
      - Patrick Kane; Chicago Blackhawks
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      Blondstrom wrote:

      As you've probably guessed, I'm in love with someone I'm not with and the other night I had a dream we were together, then got a call from her yesterday and it was a little weird, but reminded me of how I felt in the dream vs. knowing we'll probably never be together.

      It's kind of lame, but I miss her.

      :(
      Is it an issue of distance? Or one person having feelings, while the other doesn't?
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      Hipster wrote:

      :(
      Is it an issue of distance? Or one person having feelings, while the other doesn't?


      Mostly distance. We talked about being together before, and I've told her how I feel about her, but we eventually decided a relationship isn't fair for either of us. She lives in the US, I'm in Canada. We chat and Skype sometimes, but it's nothing like in person.

      I'm sure she isn't as in love with me as I am with her, but she's admitted she likes me and would go out if it weren't for proximity. We have some mutual friends, too, so we're actually planning a meet up next summer, and potentially some NHL events, but who knows.

      For now, I'm just reading romantic poetry, hoping that one day things will come together. With her, or someone else.
      "Haters can keep hating, but I'm just gonna dance."
      - Patrick Kane; Chicago Blackhawks
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      Blondstrom wrote:

      Mostly distance. We talked about being together before, and I've told her how I feel about her, but we eventually decided a relationship isn't fair for either of us. She lives in the US, I'm in Canada. We chat and Skype sometimes, but it's nothing like in person.

      I'm sure she isn't as in love with me as I am with her, but she's admitted she likes me and would go out if it weren't for proximity. We have some mutual friends, too, so we're actually planning a meet up next summer, and potentially some NHL events, but who knows.

      For now, I'm just reading romantic poetry, hoping that one day things will come together. With her, or someone else.

      Ah, that's too bad. Hopefully you can make good of that potential meet up :p
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      I kind of slipped into a bit of depression again. It kind of comes in waves, I guess.

      If Time Heals All Wounds

      If time heals all wounds
      Why do some grow bigger?
      Infection sets in and the trouble begins
      When there is no one there to cure it

      Your mind goes weak
      The longer you speak
      But the pain is just so compelling

      And as the seconds pass
      You turn to grass, or perhaps another solution
      It’s the trust of fate
      That makes you wait
      Even when you don’t know why.

      You can see the end, like a nice old friend
      And everything else just fades to black

      If time heals all wounds
      Then why are so many fatal?
      "Haters can keep hating, but I'm just gonna dance."
      - Patrick Kane; Chicago Blackhawks

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