Just Because

    • Just Because

      The sky kissed the golden line
      where the lack of light met the neon signs
      and the fire gripped my perfect muse,
      while the lungs of my life dissolved around you.

      This can't go on much longer
      "we" is like reading Plato through water,
      but tonight we'll live like we deserve
      married, and miserable in the real world.

      I'll play guitar for our two kids
      and you'll sing and dance the way my father did.
      But tonight sucks, like it always does.
      So let's get high, just because.








      So... Gimme thoughts.
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    • Re: Just Because

      Butthurt Burt wrote:

      this is pretty horrendous poetry IMO

      it starts out awfully pretentious with just cringe-worthy imagery, then the next two verses are completely unrelated to the first, and each other. and... yeah. it's bad.


      Let me dig for you.

      The sky kissed the golden line
      where the lack of light met the neon signs
      and the fire gripped my perfect muse,
      while the lungs of my life dissolved around you.


      I'm getting high, and I'm telling the love of my life about my life.


      This can't go on much longer
      "we" is like reading Plato through water,
      but tonight we'll live like we deserve
      married, and miserable in the real world.


      I was saying that me and the love of my life's relationship is outrageously complicated
      so much so that we pretend we're something we're not.


      I'll play guitar for our two kids
      and you'll sing and dance the way my father did.

      But tonight sucks, like it always does.
      So let's get high, just because.


      That continues here, and then it ends with me saying "fuck it let's just keep getting high".

      Maybe it's pretentious, but hey, I never claimed to not be. Look at my username. Look at my signature. Look at everything I've ever posted. If ever you needed an excuse to call someone pretentious that would probably be it. Lmao.
      However, the stanzas*** were definitely related to each other. It might have just gone over your head. :rolleyes:
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