If I can master the Sonnet..

    • If I can master the Sonnet..

      I recently wrote a "sonnet" for some chick's class.
      It is NOT in Iambic Pentameter, because I can't write in Iambic Pentameter very well.
      The way I see it is this:
      IF I CAN SIT MY ASS DOWN AND LEARN IAMBIC PENTAMETER, I'LL BE ABLE TO WRITE MUCH MUCH MUCH BETTER!!

      So that's my next goal.
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      This is my playground for only my fun,
      I walk the halls and command respect,
      I do what I please and it can't be undone.
      They all bow to me, everyone's an insect.

      They stuff me in lockers and drop my books,
      I cry and I scream but its all to no avail!
      One day I'll hurt them for all their mean looks.
      I'll kill them someday and send them all to hell!

      I see that boy and i cry a little,
      I inquire of him of what has gone wrong.
      I feel bad for him for his psyche is surely brittle,
      I hold him tight and sing to him, a song.

      The bully, the wimp, the kind hearted fool
      They mean little to me, I don't even go to school.


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    • Re: If I can master the Sonnet..

      As an english student, and if you want, I'd be more than happy to help you build upon your writing skills.

      Personally I love sonnets. I find them to be one of the greatest forms of expressive writing. Your sonnet is very dark obviously. Tell me this has no symbolic links to your own life.

      It's written well for a person who doesn't think they are as good as they can be yet. I can respect you for that.
    • Re: If I can master the Sonnet..

      Hahaha I suppose it does have a slight twinge of my dark humor in it.

      I really tried to keep myself out of it because ,as I've already stated, it was written for someone else to turn in as an assignment.

      I just hope the lack of iambic pentameter doesn't earn her a failing grade.

      Anyways, thanks for the offer of help.
      Maybe I'll take you up on that offer some day.
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