For English I'm guessing? It's good you have use of techniques liek pairs of 3, similies, short sentences, alliteration. I hope this sin't true ha, would be quite tormenting if it was, enjoyable to read aswell, I'm also guessing it's for your descriptive pieces? because you described quite a few things in there and we always got told to remember the senses, so maybe adding a bit of smell of fear or something? If it is English coursework then it won't matter that much, if your worried about what …
err bit rbbish but all I can think of at the moemnt Imagine being on the receiving end of anything that you post online. How would it make you feel to read any of the things you have posted? Or, how SHOULD it make you feel? like empathy, don't give out what you wouldn't want to see yourself. Online Etiquette is important.
No insults like calling people stupid, because maybe they aren't aware of things that others are... I've seen it before. hmm lemme get back to you on more
haha sounds pretty good In lower school we just had sports day, where every year everyone competed against each otherin runnign races and field events like Javelin.
Credit goes to Jess for this but P1000231x.JPG noblepig.com/2008/04/23/get-yo…ts-outyou-might-need-them. IT TELLS YOU HOW TO MAKE THEM! sorry but it looks so nice - I meann choc, marshmallow anddd banana all in the same thing?:love1: I'm making them this weekend!