My first poem.

    • My first poem.

      Oh pitiful shadow!
      Wallowing in darkness and sin.
      Degrading and bringing harm upon other's.

      A miserable existence.
      A wicked ball of karma drounding in vile sin's.
      I will ask you this only once...

      Would you care to give death a try?


      This was my first poem so I hoped you liked it. Please give me any feedback positive or negative.
      Technology is neither good nor bad, nor even neutral. Technology is one part of the complex of relationships that people form with each other and the world around them; it simply cannot be understood outside of that concept.

    • Re: My first poem.

      ~EmoCuttingAngel~ wrote:

      I honestly like this a lot. You seem to have a message behind it and everything :)

      Thank you very much. It's actually pretty deep if you think about it long enough.
      Technology is neither good nor bad, nor even neutral. Technology is one part of the complex of relationships that people form with each other and the world around them; it simply cannot be understood outside of that concept.

    • Re: My first poem.

      Jordioa18 wrote:

      I understand the meaning in this and you told it in a good way.

      I'm no poetic guy myself, so don't expect a poem from me :P

      Thank's for the compliment man. :D
      Technology is neither good nor bad, nor even neutral. Technology is one part of the complex of relationships that people form with each other and the world around them; it simply cannot be understood outside of that concept.