Hi, new here, so take it easy?
Anyway, there is this girl I really like and in a moment of sappiness a while back, I wrote this about her. She will most likely never see it (since it would be kinda wierd/creepy. Still, I would like to get some input. So, how is it?
When I first met you a while
back, ________[I removed the name. Suffice to say it rhymes with 'be']
I wondered who that beautiful girl could possibly be
Then I got to know you, and came to understand
There was none like you in all the land
(Cliche, I know, but what can I do?
It's what comes to me when I think of you)
So I wrote you something (hope it doesn't sound hollow
It's a little poem, and goes as follows:
As I gaze up at night at the stars in the sky,
I am fondly reminded of your shining eyes
Your smile could open hearts like doors
And all beauty pales when compared to yours
Your laughter fills the whole world with joy
And brightens even the worst of days
You're so kind, and nice, and friendly too
In fact, I've never met a girl quite like you
If there another way to say it, I don't know how
So I'll go ahead and stop writing now
So that's it. Its not really complete since it was a kind of spur-of-the-moment thing, and some of the rhyming might be sort of weird but whatever.
Anyway, there is this girl I really like and in a moment of sappiness a while back, I wrote this about her. She will most likely never see it (since it would be kinda wierd/creepy. Still, I would like to get some input. So, how is it?
When I first met you a while
back, ________[I removed the name. Suffice to say it rhymes with 'be']
I wondered who that beautiful girl could possibly be
Then I got to know you, and came to understand
There was none like you in all the land
(Cliche, I know, but what can I do?
It's what comes to me when I think of you)
So I wrote you something (hope it doesn't sound hollow
It's a little poem, and goes as follows:
As I gaze up at night at the stars in the sky,
I am fondly reminded of your shining eyes
Your smile could open hearts like doors
And all beauty pales when compared to yours
Your laughter fills the whole world with joy
And brightens even the worst of days
You're so kind, and nice, and friendly too
In fact, I've never met a girl quite like you
If there another way to say it, I don't know how
So I'll go ahead and stop writing now
So that's it. Its not really complete since it was a kind of spur-of-the-moment thing, and some of the rhyming might be sort of weird but whatever.