Hi I wrote a poem for my boy friend and want to know if it is good and what can be done to make it better if need be, It is going in a photo album for his 16th.
Baby Your On My Mind
You are always on my mind
Here you will find my thoughts, outlined
You are my eternal sunshine
I hope you'll forever be mine
With our love combined everything is in reach
Together we can withstand any siege
Words cannot express
How you have captured my heart with success
Being with you makes everything else so futile
Being with you makes life really worthwhile
You are my sweetheart day by day
Without you my life goes astray
This Rose is for you, I hope you will like it
Hoping to capture your heart, bit by bit
This poem has come to an end
There are many more I would like to send
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